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commadorebob 07-28-2012 03:28 PM

Change the Plot (Star Trek: Generations)
 
Your assignment is to pretend that Star Trek Generations didn't happen. You are, however, required to write a story that accomplishes the following:
  • Destroy the Enterprise-D
  • Kill Kirk
  • Kill the Duras Sisters
  • Maintain continuity with other films (no destroying Romulus, etc)

Tell us your story.

centersolace 07-28-2012 03:41 PM

How? Do we summarize the plot? Or write a ******ned novel?

nrobbiec 07-28-2012 03:43 PM

Give Kirk as little screen time as possible since he's the least important character in the entire franchise. Like have Soran break his neck when his back is turned. That would lead to Soran being imprisoned, then 80 years later escaping. Rest of the movie can carry on pretty much as it is (it's the 2nd best Trek film after First Contact) only bring in the Romulans more, have Sela learn of them stealing the trilithium and team up with the Enterprise-D (Duras sisters would need to be in something more powerful than a Bird of Prey for that to work) Ent-D is crippled beyond repair during the battle. Romulans beam Ent-D crew aboard and take them to Earth.

markhawkman 07-28-2012 05:07 PM

I like that idea! Hmm... have Soran talk one of the Klingon houses into helping him, thus giving the sisters a small fleet to work with.

tlamstrike 07-28-2012 06:01 PM

Change the plot? I don't think it needs to be changed but it does need some major editing. I would keep most of the movie but change the end and some of the plot points to make it more TNG-like.

The Enterprise-B rescues a group of Al-Auran refugees on its maiden voyage. James T. Kirk is killed.

78 years later The Enterprise-D answers a distress call from the Amargosa Observatory. Romulans attacked the station and only one survived, Dr. Soran. Little does the Enterprise crew know that Dr. Soran has been helping the Duras sisters in their bid to reclaim the Klingon Empire and restore their house's honor.

Dr. Soren destroys the Amargosa star and captures Enterprise Engineer Lt. Cmdr. La Forge. Aboard the Duras Sister's Bird of Prey Dr. Soren use's Lt. La Forge's neural implants from his Visor to reconfigure the Romulan brainwashing that was used on him in 'The Mind's Eye' (one of the reasons he had the Duras sisters attack a Romulan Outpost, the other was to steal outpost's store of Trilithum resin). Soren reprograms La Forge to sabotage the Enterprise upon his return.

Aboard the Enterprise the crew learns that Soren is trying to return to an energy ribbon called the Nexus, an anomaly that almost destroyed the Enterprise-B 78 years before. They deduce that he is going to destroy the primary star of the Veridian system; a system home to a Federation colony of several hundred million.

Upon arriving at Veridian III the Enterprise confronts the Duras sisters who agree to swap Mr. La Forge for Captain Picard on the condition they allow the captain to talk to Soren on the planet.

Aboard the Enterprise La Forge's brainwashing goes unnoticed my Dr. Crusher. In Engineering he disabled the Enterprise's weapons and shields. On the planet Picard vainly attempts to talk Soren out of his actions, while above the planet the Enterprise is destroyed by the Duras sisters.

The Veridian star is destroyed and Picard and Soren enter the nexus. The Captain catches on quickly that he is in an illusion. He then finds Guinan in the Nexus, a figment of her that remains in the Nexus from the incident with the Enterprise-B. Picard asks Guinan for help but she is just an echo of the person who has just died aboard the Enterprise-D, she tells Picard how he can travel the Nexus and find help from others trapped in it.

Picard finds Captain James Kirk and convinces him to help. The two Captain's search out Soren who is in the Nexus living with his Nexus recreated wife and children. The Captains appeal to Soren who refused to go back and reverse what he has done. But all the other consciousnesses trapped in the Nexus learn what Soren has done to get there (most where trapped by accident like Kirk) they collectively turn their desires in to Soren's hell; Collective being the operative word: they turn his life in to that of the Borg drone that assimilated his family back in the Delta Quadrant. Soren breaks down and realizes the horror of what he has done and agrees to help.

The Captains formulate a plan, Picard and Soren II will go back to Veridian III, Soren II will convince himself to stop with the vision of what he has seen in the Nexus while Kirk must help stop the Duras sisters from destroying the Enterprise-D since the Enterprise is the only ship that could stop Soren's probe from reaching the Veridian star if Picard and Soren II fail.

Kirk appears aboard the Klingon Bird of Prey during the battle disables the ship's weapons before being killed by one of the Duras sisters, going down in a blaze of glory. The loss of time allows the Enterprise crew of discover what has happened and restore their defenses. The Duras sisters in an attempt to restore their honor ram the Enterprise, striking the secondary hull. The Enterprise crew abandon ship, the Enterprise herself succumbs to a core breach.

On the planet Soren II tried to convince Soren to stop, but its futile. Picard distracts Soren allowing Soren II to try to stop the probe from being fired. In the end Soren and Soren II face down around the probe launcher, Soren II sabotaged it and causes it to explode killing both of himselves. Picard ponders in the end on how Soren who had been willing to kill millions for selfish reasons could in turn sacrifice himself to save millions if shown the error of his ways.

Side note: La Forge's visor is replaced by optical implants partially out of this incident. Starfleet considers the technology too susceptible to missuse.

tajrek 07-28-2012 06:49 PM

Kirk is shown being Cryogenically frozen much to the sadness of the original crew. The facility he is frozen in is forgotten and time moves on. Cut to the modern TNG era and the Duras sisters find a old forgotten outpost past the neutral zone in Federation space. They decide to plunder it and find the cryo tube containing Kirk. They decide to unfreeze him and hold him hostage to the Federation. Kirk awakens with a hundred year old space boner and seduces the sisters . Cut scene and he's in their bed and find's out there is a new Enterprise led by a bald british accented frenchman . Kirk goes into a rage that the Enterprise is piolted by a bald man and takes over the Bord of Prey with the Duras sisters as his women. The ship cloaks and goes after the Enterprise. The ship decloaks in front of the enterprise and starts firing disruptors. On board the Enterprise Picard and crew are confused why this old Bird of Prey is attacking them doing minimum damage? They go on the offensive . Just as they start Kirk pulls some crazy Kirk maneuver and heavily damages the Enterprise just as the Enterprise gets a fatal shot on the Bird of Prey. The Duras sisters die transporting Kirk to the planet. The Enterprise D crashes just like in the movie . Picard and crew evacuate and tend to the wounded. Kirk appears out of no where and starts beating the crap out of Picard . Picard and Kirk fight for like 30 minutes when Kirk starts to die falling to teh floor. Beverly scans him and finds that Kirk's DNA was damaged when he was frozen. Kirk dieing makes peace with Picard. Picard holding his hand asks if there is anything he can do for the captain of the Enterprise. Kirk gasphing for breath says for gods sakes man put something on your head... and dies. Every movie onward picard wears a toupee .
Roll Credits

That's How Taj"rek@RontheDude sees it anyways....

commadorebob 07-28-2012 07:38 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by centersolace (Post 5017781)
How? Do we summarize the plot? Or write a ******ned novel?

Either. But walls of text are hard to read so give us the tl;dr version. A synopsis will be sufficient.

For my part, keep the movie the same up until Kirk's "death" on the Enterprise-B. After that, have the Enterprise-D show up in time to combat the Romulans. Instead of Soran and the Duras Sisters stealing the trilithium, have the Romulans freely give it to them and they were at the observatory to "collect their payment." The Enterprise arriving puts the Romulans and the Duras sisters in a bind as they would have proof of their collusion, so the Duras Sisters cloak and the Romulans start blasting the observatory to throw Picard off the right track and to kill any witnesses. Picard knows nothing of the Nexus and so he orders Data to look for it.

Picard then sends the Enterprise to approach the Nexus to get more data when unexpectedly, Kirk appears on the bridge. Mass confusion takes place until Kirk explains he was on the Enterprise-B and then found himself here. Picard and Kirk discuss what has happened in the last 80 years and then the Enterprise hunts down the Duras sisters at Veridiian. Once there, Picard beams down to the surface in exchange for Geordi, but Kirk remains on the bridge with Riker to help with strategy.

On the planet, Picard explains that the Nexus isn't what Soran thinks it is. It's not a portal to an endless orgasm, it's a basic time distortion. His "family" that he saw in the Nexus were just echos of the past and not real. Picard's speechifying manages to reach Soran who admits this idea is no better than what the Borg are doing and he agrees to disarm the weapon. But admits there is a problem, a Romulan ship is monitoring the launch because they are interested in the technology. If he deactivates the missile, the Romulans are sure to act.

Sure enough, as soon as he deactivates the missile, the Romulans beam down and try to take the missile. Soran and Picard try to fight off the Romulans and during the confrontation, Soran is mortally wounded. As Picard starts to go help Soran, the Romulans approach the missile and beam it up. Picard then tries his best to keep Soran alive.

The Duras Sisters attack and a Romulan warbird also decloaks and starts wailing on the Enterprise. Riker and Kirk come up with a plan to separate the ship with Kirk taking the stardrive after the Romulans. After the saucer separates, Kirk manages to get a lucky torpedo shot out that destroys the Duras Sisters' ship. He then turns his focus on the Romulans. The Romulans, meanwhile prepare to take out the saucer when Kirk flies the star drive in the crossfire, critically damaging the Stardrive and severely injuring Kirk. In a parallel to the Wrath of Kahn, Kirk pulls himself into the Captain's chair and sets a collision course with the Romulan ship. The Romulans are about to come full bore onto the saucer when there is a mysterious explosion in their cargo bay. Not looking a gift horse in the mouth, Kirk adjusts his course to the now shield-free section of the Romulan ship. The ships collide, explode, and the saucer is forced to crash land on the surface.

On the planet, Picard notices the large explosion in orbit. Soran, with his dying breath, chuckles. Picard asks him what is so funny, but Soran doesn't answer. He's dead.

Picard then addresses the mass of survivors on the hull of the Enterprise. He praises Kirk, Soran, and the Enterprise. He explains how all three come from different backgrounds (one named after a ship of legend, one actual legend, and one man on the wrong path), but in the end all gave their life for the greater good. That's when Crusher's remark from First Contact is used properly. Picard, as he is looking over his ship, is approached by Data who asks, "do you think they'll build another Enterprise." Picard smiles and replies, "Plenty of letters left in the alphabet." The camera then pulls out to find Data and Picard standing inside the "D" of NCC-1701-D and as the camera pulls out into space we get a quick glimpse of the rescue ships as we fade to the credits.

tl;dr
Have Kirk appear on the Enterprise-D.
Have Romulan-Duras connection play out to its final conclusion.
Have Picard change Soran's mind.
Have Kirk die on the battle bridge of the Enterprise-D.
Ignore the Nexus other than to have Kirk arrive.
Remove the cosmic CTRL-Z that take up the latter half of the film.

ltcmdjamescore 07-29-2012 08:22 AM

I like tlamstrike's plot BUT...

I missed the scene, where saucer section lands on the planet (maybe the best scene of this movie). BUT...

It can be added with no damage to tlamstrike's plot.

thoroon 07-29-2012 08:36 AM

Q farted.
Everyone died, everything "built" fell to pieces.

centersolace 07-29-2012 01:41 PM

Huh... tlamstrike's plot works very well. Not only that, it doesn't change much either, and it is still a much better movie. I would pay money to see that.

Quote:

Originally Posted by ltcmdjamescore (Post 5024941)
I missed the scene, where saucer section lands on the planet (maybe the best scene of this movie). BUT...

It can be added with no damage to tlamstrike's plot.

I think that's what's so brilliant about it.


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