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# 145
08-01-2013, 12:21 PM
Ok, the rewrite is in. @danqueller provided notes I decided to incorporate. Although longer than I prefer, it may be an improvement.

I also decided the antagonist should be as distant as his crew. Besides, we won't be seeing him again

I hate to ask for people's time to reread an entry, but as I also am not used to rewriting or adding to my entries, I'm hoping for additional feedback
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