Hypercritical Jerk will review your missions...
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Join Date: Dec 2007
08-10-2011, 11:42 AM
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Sorry for the unsolicited review. If you tighten it up and want a re-review, let me know and I will go back thru it.
Now that the foundry is up and running again I have been making some serious modifications to 'Relapse' wbich you reviewed back in May. It was my first attempt at manipulating the Foundry and I have learned a great deal in that time.
While your technical commentary on my spelling and such was valuable I would be more interested in your thoughts on the story. I recall you called it muddled.
I should have the edges smoothed out soon enough and I will let you know when it is ready for a re-review.
My one comment though is that the majority of my OOC text will remain intact. While the Foundry is very versitile, it is limited.