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Lt. Commander
Join Date: Dec 2007
Posts: 120
# 50
03-24-2012, 06:15 PM
Paradoxically, I find that I identify less with the story when I have to read pages of "my" dialogue. Your dialogue is quite well written. It's that it disrupts the feeling that I'm in the story by causing me to go "hey that's not what I'd do!"

Hmm... suppose branching dialogue paths with differing personalities to the dialogue would make it feel more real, but I know how time consuming it can be to do 1 Dialogue chain. I can't imagine actually writing 3-4...