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Join Date: Dec 2007
Posts: 120
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Originally Posted by Duke-of-Rock View Post
Hi Brian,

Just a quick note for you to check out my new daily mission when you get a chance. I't's a short and sweet little mish thats great for the daily dilithium. Thought it would be cool to get your review take on it.

Title: Argus Array Repair Daily
By: Duke-of-Rock
Allegiance: Federation
Language: English
Level: Any Level
Starting Location: Wall Console outside Main Transporter Room on Earth Space Dock


Thanks again for all you do for the Foundry Community.

Craig aka: Duke-of-Rock
Federation Mission - Argus Array Repair Daily
Author: Duke-of-Rock
Allegiance: Federation
Project ID:

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Summary: This is a great mission. The map design is outstanding and the interaction well done. The story dialogue is very well written. It was a very enjoyable 15 minutes without anyone shooting at me. I also liked the ability to go back and repair the damage from the “Spawn of Medusa” series. I actually felt bad when the array got damaged. I would highly recommend this mission to any player who likes a good short story with well designed maps, good story dialogue, interactive tasks and no one shooting at you for the 15 minutes or less this mission takes.

Below are two items I noted while playing the mission that I wanted to let you know about. Everything in this write up should be seen as suggestions on ways I felt you could improve certain elements of the mission. They are yours to do with as you see fit.

Mission Description: This is a good description. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this description.

Grant Mission Dialogue: This is a good grant dialogue. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this dialogue.

Mission Task: Consider adding the start location for the first custom map.

Mission Entry Prompt: This is a good, detailed prompt. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this prompt.

MAPS:
Damaged Argus Array: This is a good map design with some nice interactive functions for the player. The story dialogue is well written. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this dialogue or any issues with the map.

Argus Array Maintenance Core: This is a good map design. The story dialogue is very well written. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this dialogue or any issues with the map.

Argus Array: This is a good map design and a nice wrap up to the mission. The story dialogue is very well written. I noted one item to consider changing:
-The post "scan the array" dialogue; consider changing "and I my scan tell me" to read "and my scan tells me".

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Thanks again for authoring and for giving me the chance to review your work. You did a great job with this mission.
Brian

This critique report also filed 04/21/2012 on forum posting for: In depth mission reports upon request.