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Originally Posted by designationxr377 View Post
Mission Name: The Computer's Daughter
Author: XR-377
Minimum Level: 16+
Allegiance: Federation
Project ID: ST-HAX922V0C
Estimated Mission Length: 1h - 3h
Method of Report Delivery: Forum Post
Federation Mission - The Computer's Daughter
Author: XR-377
Allegiance: Federation
Project ID: ST-HAX922V0C

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Summary: This is an excellent mission albeit a long story oriented mission. From the great map designs through the excellent, in depth, story dialogue, and the tough but fun battles scattered throughout, I was riveted to my seat from the first map all the way through. I would highly recommend this mission to all players who like a combination of an excellent story with great map design. You will love the mission despite the length. If you do not like story oriented missions then this one is not for you.

The only real issue I noted was the "Optional Dialogue" you used on a couple of the maps. Consider using triggered dialogue instead. This would allow the player to interact with NPCs on that map and once they do so the dialogue option disappears. You can also set it up so if certain story elements are completed then the optional dialogue would disappear as well.

Below are a couple of things I noted while playing the mission that I wanted to let you know about. Everything in this write up should be seen as suggestions on ways I felt you could improve certain elements of the mission. They are yours to do with as you see fit.

Mission Description: This is a good description. Consider moving the actual mission description ahead of the [MissionInfo] dialogue that indicates the nature of the mission. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this description.

Grant Mission Dialogue: This is a good grant dialogue. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this dialogue.

Mission Task: This is a good initial task with a clear location for the start of the first custom map. I noted no spelling errors with this task.

Mission Entry Prompt: This is a good use of the prompt. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this prompt.

MAPS:
Lackey System Rendezvous Point: This is a good map design with excellent, in depth story dialogue. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this dialogue or any issues with the map.

Paulson Nebula, First Contact Point: This is a great map design with excellent story dialogue. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this dialogue or any issues with the map.

First Contact Meeting, Lower Decks: This is a good map design with very well written story dialogue. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this dialogue. I noted one item to consider changing:
-Consider changing all the current "Optional Dialogue" to triggered dialogue that goes away after the player interacts with it.

Paulson Nebula, Cultural Exchange: This is a great map design with a fun battle and excellent story dialogue. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this dialogue or any issues with the map.

[b][color="Red"]Paulson Nebula, Dense Cloud Fields: This is a great map design with several tough but not impossible battles. The story dialogue is very well written. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this dialogue. I noted one item to consider changing:
-Consider changing all the current "Optional Dialogue" to triggered dialogue that goes away after the player interacts with it.

Paulson Nebula, Confrontation: This is a great map design with a fun battle and excellent story dialogue. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this dialogue or any issues with the map.

Starship ICAI: This is a great map design with some tough, but fun battles and excellent story dialogue. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this dialogue or any issues with the map.

Paulson Nebula, Face to Face: This is a great map design with excellent story dialogue, and is a good wrap up to this mission. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this dialogue or any issues with the map.

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Thanks again for authoring and for giving me the chance to review your work. You did a great job developing this mission, from the dialogue through the map design and the battles. It was very enjoyable and I hardly notice the length. I look forward to playing/reviewing more of your work, including the Klingon version of this mission next up in the queue.
Brian
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Last edited by evil70th; 09-09-2012 at 06:03 PM.