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Join Date: Jun 2012
Mission Critique Report - The Galaxy's Fair
12-27-2012, 05:46 PM
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I asked for a review earlier but pulled it but my missions are now up and ready.
The Galaxy's Fair
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Duritanium Man comes first.
As always :Thanks!
Federation Mission - The Galaxy's Fair
Project ID: ST-HIL8TIJ29
This is a great non-combat mission with excellent story dialogue. The interactive stories are well done and interesting. I like several of the jokes buried in the dialogue that I found pretty funny. There are several individual stories in this mission that have the potential to become great stand alone stories. I would definitely recommend this mission to other players who like well written stories.
Below are a couple of things I noted while playing the mission that I wanted to let you know about. Everything in this write up should be seen as suggestions on ways I felt you could improve certain elements of the mission. They are yours to do with as you see fit.
This is a good description. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this description.
Grant Mission Dialogue:
This is a good grant dialogue. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this dialogue.
This is a good initial task with a clear start location for the first custom map. I noted no spelling errors with this task.
Mission Entry Prompt:
This is a good use of the prompt. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this prompt.
This is a good map design with several interactive stories throughout. The story dialogue is well written. I noted a couple of items to consider changing:
-There are at least two NPCs standing away from consoles they are typing on. They appear to be typing in mid air.
-The transgate is gone but the strange aliens from the portal are still present following the hole being blasted in the deck.
Thanks again for authoring and for giving me the chance to review your work. This is a good mission and I enjoyed not having someone shooting at me.
I look forward to playing/reviewing more of your work in the future.
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