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Join Date: Jun 2012
Posts: 941
Originally Posted by zorbane View Post
Hey evil70th,

I asked for a review earlier but pulled it but my missions are now up and ready.

Mission Name: The Galaxy's Fair
Author: @Zorbane
Minimum Level: Any level
Allegiance: Federation
Project ID: ST-HIL8TIJ29
Estimated Mission Length: 20-30minutes
Method of Report Delivery: Forum Post

Duritanium Man comes first.

As always :Thanks!
Federation Mission - The Galaxy's Fair
Author: Zorbane
Allegiance: Federation
Project ID: ST-HIL8TIJ29

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Summary: This is a great non-combat mission with excellent story dialogue. The interactive stories are well done and interesting. I like several of the jokes buried in the dialogue that I found pretty funny. There are several individual stories in this mission that have the potential to become great stand alone stories. I would definitely recommend this mission to other players who like well written stories.

Below are a couple of things I noted while playing the mission that I wanted to let you know about. Everything in this write up should be seen as suggestions on ways I felt you could improve certain elements of the mission. They are yours to do with as you see fit.

Mission Description: This is a good description. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this description.

Grant Mission Dialogue: This is a good grant dialogue. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this dialogue.

Mission Task: This is a good initial task with a clear start location for the first custom map. I noted no spelling errors with this task.

Mission Entry Prompt: This is a good use of the prompt. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this prompt.

Convention Centre: This is a good map design with several interactive stories throughout. The story dialogue is well written. I noted a couple of items to consider changing:
-There are at least two NPCs standing away from consoles they are typing on. They appear to be typing in mid air.
-The transgate is gone but the strange aliens from the portal are still present following the hole being blasted in the deck.

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Thanks again for authoring and for giving me the chance to review your work. This is a good mission and I enjoyed not having someone shooting at me. I look forward to playing/reviewing more of your work in the future.
If you would like a detailed review of your mission please visit my forum posting "In depth mission reports upon request" for details. Also see Evil 70th's list of missions at "Evil 70th's Missions".