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Join Date: Jun 2012
Posts: 752
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Originally Posted by q403 View Post
Title: Cold Enemies
Level: 35 +
Faction: Federation
Estimated Length: 15 Minutes
@Q400

For Foundry challenge five.
Federation Mission - Cold Enemies
Author: Q400
Allegiance: Federation
Project ID: ST-HMPU9PRYS

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Summary: The mission is a nice combat oriented mission with some story dialogue to move it forward. I would recommend this mission to other players who like combat oriented missions, although not on Elite level as it was challenging enough on Normal level.

Below are a couple of things I noted while playing the mission that I wanted to let you know about. Everything in this write up should be seen as suggestions on ways I felt you could improve certain elements of the mission. They are yours to do with as you see fit.

Mission Description: This is a good description. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this description.

Grant Mission Dialogue: The grant dialogue and follow dialogue are well written. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this dialogue.

Mission Task: This is a good initial task with a clear start location for the first custom map. I noted no spelling errors with this task.

Mission Entry Prompt: This is a good use of the prompt. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this prompt.

MAPS:
The Vault System: This is a nice map design with several tough but fun battles. The story dialogue is well written. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this dialogue or any issues with the map.

The Vault - Floor Three - Engineering and Cargobays: This is a good map design with a tough but fun battle. I noted one item to consider changing:
-One of the injured Reman?s is sitting above the medical bed.

Meeting System: This is a good map design with a nice battle. The story dialogue is well written. I noted one item to consider changing:
-The "Angered Admiral" dialogue; consider changing "[Rank]?[Rank]?" to read "[Rank]? [Rank]?".

Meeting Place: This is a nice simple map design with some tough but fun battles. The story dialogue is well written. I noted one item to consider changing:
-Consider adding a respawn point closer to the Breen position.

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Thanks again for authoring and for giving me the chance to review your work. I enjoyed the mission and good luck in the challenge. I look forward to playing/reviewing more of your work in the future.
Brian
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