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Join Date: Jun 2012
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Originally Posted by designationxr377 View Post
I figure I'll toss this one at you for the polish and input you give. Thanks in advance, as always. (Be careful/aware that some dialog trees may provoke different effects, but should not effect mission completion, only flow.)


Mission: Time Will Tell
Author: XR-377
Level: 31+
Allegiance: Klingon
Estimated Mission Length:30-45m (Full Dialog Tree Exploration may yield different results)
Method of Delivery: Forum Post

Description: When K.D.F. High Command asks you to investigate a strange anomaly near Qo'noS you find yourself face to face with a dark future for the Empire. Will you find the guides you need to make sure it doesn't come to pass?
Klingon Mission - Time Will Tell
Author: XR-377
Allegiance: Klingon
Project ID: ST-HG93ODWIE

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Summary: This is a great mission with glorious battles, good map designs, and excellent story dialogue. It is always difficult to create a mission that involves temporal elements in the story, but you handled it quite well. I would highly recommend this mission to other players.

Below are a couple of things I noted while playing the mission that I wanted to let you know about. Everything in this write up should be seen as suggestions on ways I felt you could improve certain elements of the mission. They are yours to do with as you see fit.

Mission Description: This is a good description. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this description.

Grant Mission Dialogue: This is a good grant dialogue. I noted one item to consider changing:
-Consider changing "strange anomaly nearby Qo'nos" to read "strange anomaly nearby Qo'noS".

Mission Task: This is a good initial task with a clear start location for the first custom map. I noted no spelling errors with this task

Mission Entry Prompt: This is a good use of the prompt. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this prompt.

MAPS:
Investigate the Anomaly in the Kahless Expanse: This is a good map design with excellent story dialogue. I noted one item to consider changing:
-The post "Escape by Creating a Stationary Warp Bubble Near the Anomaly" task; consider changing the response button "Very well, let's set course for Qo'nos" to read "Very well, let's set course for Qo'noS".

Qo'noS System: This is a good map design with glorious battles and excellent story dialogue. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this dialogue or any issues with the map.

Qo'noS, First City: This is a good map design with glorious battles and excellent story dialogue. I noted a couple of items to consider changing:
-The Klingon Youth dialogue; consider changing "after his 3rd stint in a federation" to read "after his 3rd stint in a Federation".
-Consider changing the optional dialogue to triggered dialogue that goes away after the player interacts with it.

Obscure Safe House: This is a good map design with excellent story dialogue. I noted one item to consider changing:
-Consider changing the optional dialogue to triggered dialogue that goes away after the player interacts with it.

Qo'noS, Federation Counterattack: This is a good map design with glorious battles and excellent story dialogue. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this dialogue or any issues with the map.

Qo'noS, First City Under Attack: This is a good map design with glorious battles and excellent story dialogue. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this dialogue or any issues with the map.

Qo'noS System, Under Attack: This is a good map design with glorious optional battles and excellent story dialogue. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this dialogue or any issues with the map.

Investigate the Anomaly in the Kahless Expanse, Again: This is a good map design with excellent story dialogue and I liked the "Back to the Future" style ending.

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Thanks again for authoring and for giving me the chance to review your work. You did a great job developing this mission and I look forward to playing/reviewing more of your work in the future.
Brian
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