Literary Challenge #36 Discussion Thread
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Join Date: Sep 2012
01-13-2013, 01:18 PM
Feedback on feedback
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Here is some (hopefully) constructive feedback on your entry.
You might want to consider a stronger conclusion, or a cliff hanger to be resolved in the next literary challenge. Maybe the central computer exploded after the Reman left, or she dropped a grenade, or muttered something about revenge.
This is good advice and one I should follow as well. At the same time, the Reman's presence (being a violation) lends to the mystery of the post which speaks directly to the overall topic. I assumed it to *be* a cliffhanger.
As myself an example, I'm still under personal pressure to work on a follow-up to LC35!
Kathryn S. Beringer
The Dawn Patrol
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