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Join Date: Sep 2012
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# 2
02-06-2013, 02:55 PM
[Not bad at all for a start! My only critique would be that in entries 1 and 2 you "said again" something already stated ...

"The Nina has been commissioned for a discovery mission."
then
"Star Fleet command commissioned my ship, the U.S.S. Nina, for discovery."

"Strange emissions have been found throughout the quadrant, in fact, they are very trace, ..."
then
"They do put off trace amounts of radiation."

Otherwise, I look forward to reading the exploits of Captain Minhere and how he got to be "rogue" ]
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