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# 40
02-08-2013, 01:00 PM
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Awww...I'm glad you joined in.

For where my crew ended up, simplicity was really the only approach. I had tried other approaches, and even with no "action" taking place, they felt wrong. The additional dialogue and material just detracted from the true focus of the piece: which was that they stood upon hallowed ground.
Thanks, and likewise, it was a fun piece to write. I could've written more, but couldn't shake the feeling that I was writing the scenarios to fit the brief for the challenge, rather than letting them develop completely naturally: As mentioned above, Captain Palmer's actual reaction to the scenario (assuming the ship remained in orbit, rather than trying to crash land itself) would have been to immediately initiate a temporal vortex and return to the 25th Century with zero interaction with the planet. It was only 'being in the situation', which was why she went along with the plan to outsource the needed part, with the "Do it before I change my mind"

Absolutely, I think that was why it worked so nicely, it let the 'unsaid' come through.

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I loved Stark's reaction to Woodstock...truly awesome! I thought the story ended very well.
Thanks, I went off Obidiah Stane's line to Tony Stark in Iron Man that they had built the arc reactor "to keep the hippies quiet...", and I just figured that, despite his alcoholism, Howard would have been a pretty stoic guy who wouldn't have appreciated Woodstock or the peace movement

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Thanks. In spite of Aloysha's extreme differences from our species, and the fact that biologically he "should" be at odds with humans (and other humanoid species), Earth is where he feels he belongs. He would be flattered to know you considered him to have some form of "humanity."

I think the Starfleet charter sums up my approach to Alyosha (and other non-humans) perfectly: To seek out new life... I just think it's a shame that the English language doesn't have a better way of expressing 'humanity'. Decency/kindness etc come close, but still don't convey the sentiment behind the expression...

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As for the fact that they just had to wait...I considered other possibilities but they all felt unsuitable for the time frame.

I reasoned that since we've seen more advanced technology in the 25th century, there were items that are now standard issue for crew that could sometimes allow for such a solution, depending on the type of the anomaly. (I am specifically looking at personal shields, perhaps used in conjunction with tricorders and communicators.)
I think you made the perfect choice, as there was nothing to overpower the spiritual aspects of the encounter. I think you're probably right about the more advanced technology as well, it would make sense that their equipment would be able to better tune into temporal phenomenon.

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Maybe so. And yeah, I can see where it wouldn't be easy being grey after the Dominion War. :-/

That said, Meliden was exactly the sort of child I would have sought out to be my friend, because often those with differences were the most able to accept me for who I was and not bully.

I just wonder, though, if by changing herself, it doesn't mean the bullies won. I would have hoped that by the 24th century educators would have done a better job in intervening where bullying was taking place--especially on species grounds. Unless they were participating in it...
To be fair, the bullying was more down to her youthful 'webcam shenanigans' and another girl's jealousy, rather than purely being racially motivated, but I think mostly, given the upbringing Meliden had, it would have been more a kind of body dismorphia, and wanting to align her external self with her inner self, rather than wanting to appear Human to simply 'fit in with everyone else', if that makes any sense?

Last edited by marcusdkane; 02-08-2013 at 01:24 PM.