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Join Date: Jul 2012
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# 85
02-16-2013, 01:00 PM
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Originally Posted by ironphoenix113 View Post
@ marcus

As usual, ty For the suggestion Looking back over my story, I would definatly have to agree with you that it doesn't quite flow right. Of course I was usually writing these late at night, so that was probably not conducive to my writing.

EDIT: Adding some links for the music I used:

Color the Sky: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CveV2gkTj64
The Collector Base: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UFf60ECWpzU
The Normandy Reborn: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aXCM0lZxh4U
Jump Drive: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NGWYQY-EEnw
In Your Arms: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CRQCXPXL4Os
You're very welcome, it was the one thing which didn't quite flow, but other than that, a fine entry I know what you mean though, I've lost count of the amount of times I've written something, then re-read it and seen something that needed revision

On another note, I was wondering if you saw the Academy Days addition I posted last week, and had any thoughts on it? CmdrScarlet had asked about Captain Palmer's near expulsion from the Academy, so I decided to write it up