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Join Date: Jul 2012
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# 83
02-23-2013, 12:32 PM
Good story, Wraith. I also liked your reuse of the imagery from the Klingon's awakening, and Wraith's. It was a good framing technique.

There are some issues with the sentence structure, the punctuation, and other editing bits, but the creative part is good, and the rest should come with time.