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Join Date: Jun 2012
Posts: 1,127
# 85
02-23-2013, 02:16 PM
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Originally Posted by jonsills View Post
Good story, Wraith. I also liked your reuse of the imagery from the Klingon's awakening, and Wraith's. It was a good framing technique.

There are some issues with the sentence structure, the punctuation, and other editing bits, but the creative part is good, and the rest should come with time.
If i had more space in a single page, i wanted to write it more too seem like they were more parallel to each other rather than shoehorning it in here and there, but thank you. As for the technical stuff, it's slowly getting there but my writing skills are atrocious at times. You should have seen how bad my earlier works were, they might as well have been written in crayon lol.