Literary Challenge #40 Discussion Thread
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Join Date: Nov 2012
03-16-2013, 09:55 PM
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@sander233: Your story really dramatizes STO's mechanics: I can envision the battle happening just as it would in the game, right down to the explosions. The split between the turbolift and the bridge is a little puzzling (it feels like there should be something to foreshadow it, like a shipwide red alert), but the background on each of the characters is fascinating to read.
Thanks for your notes!
That transition is supposed to be a bit abrupt, as Jesu and Rusty are walking in on the middle of a combat exercise for the bridge crew. I apologize if I didn't make that clear. I tried to emphasize at the beginning and end of the battle scene that it was just a simulation.
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