Literary Challenge #40 Discussion Thread
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Join Date: Dec 2012
03-17-2013, 04:59 PM
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@sparklysoldier: And yet another lengthy but satisfying piece from you! I like your use of flashbacks to establish the relationship between Nyzoph and Corspa, and like the further exploration you made of Azera and the relationships she has with her crew. Although, like everyone else, I was a little confused by a Bajoran joining in a telepathic conversation. Still, great job!
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it! I've rewritten that part of the story now, just enough to remove Kwam from the conversation. The alternative, trying to explain the logic of it, would bog down the dialogue way too much, and I actually prefer him just standing there confused while Azera does the talking.