Official Legacy of Romulus 'From the Ashes' Arc Feedback Thread
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Join Date: Jun 2012
04-27-2013, 04:32 AM
I love it but some of the text seems weak... like here:
And trust me. You don't want that kind trouble.
You'd be better off with the threat only.
But all in and all out I see many texts that lack interest and story... everyone sounds like they are going to die and they talk nervously. Try to make dialog more strong.
When the torpedo hits and your character flails, you are like 5 feet away from the person talking to you.. so mostly he was talking to the ground... took much away from story.
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