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Join Date: Jun 2012
Posts: 578
# 280
04-27-2013, 04:32 AM
I love it but some of the text seems weak... like here:

The Helix: And trust me. You don't want that kind trouble. You'd be better off with the threat only.

But all in and all out I see many texts that lack interest and story... everyone sounds like they are going to die and they talk nervously. Try to make dialog more strong.

Tutorial: When the torpedo hits and your character flails, you are like 5 feet away from the person talking to you.. so mostly he was talking to the ground... took much away from story.
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