Would've been a golden opportunity for some Trek theme music like the Shipyard Departure from The Motion Picture or the main theme from Generations during the Enterprise-B's launch.
BTW, there are some glitches that has caused CTDs during the cutscene playback.
With Mars, the shipyard is different than the one in the KDF mission. But adding Phobos and Demos (Mar's Moons) was a nice touch. Though seems a bit too close to mars and seems rather missized from my perspective.
Also the sun needs to match the sun in Earth's Orbit.