I particularly like'd the overall flow of the tale. It didn't seem rushed, and - maybe because I just enjoy any Gorn content - seemed to flow quite well (and was engaging). I didn't feel the urge to skim. I really became engaged with what was being said.
Now two game aspects came to mind during the read:
What will a Gorn 'Scream' sound like in the game -- Personally I hope it is more Saurian (ie like from 'Aliens' or a painfully hiss), then a human voice trying to pretend to be a reptile.
Navigational Thrusters --- Will there be a chance to have those go 'off-line' and thus lose directional control of our ship until repaired?
Now, off to find a Klingon to sharpen my talons on. Where is Lt. Gozer?