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# 21
01-24-2013, 06:20 AM
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Originally Posted by ironphoenix113 View Post
Well, finally in. That one took me a while to type up. Might make for an interesting foundry mission...Anyway, something I feel I should probably explain, The Athena, as I'm sure you can tell, was named after the Ancient Greek goddess of wisdom and battle. In contrast, Minerva, the name of the ship commanded by Bryan's mirror counterpart, was the Roman version of the same deity. I figured that would be fitting as the Federation is very similar to the Ancient Greeks, more concerned with discovery than war, whereas the Terran Empire is quite similar to the Roman Empire; heavily focused on conquest and battle, thus making for a fitting contrast between Bryan and his "twin."

Also, if I were to turn this into a movie, the following would be the soundtrack:

Meeting the Minerva: Atrocity; Sound of Silence (Watchmen soundtrack)
Discussing the plans: Christopher Lennertz; Stand Strong, Stand Together (Mass Effect 3 OST)
The Battle: (artist unknown); Suicide Mission (Mass Effect 2 OST)
Ibalei's death?: Thomas Bergersen Undying Love (Legend)

And, tbh, I have NO clue who I'd cast for each of my characters
Absolutely fantastic entry, I really enjoyed it, and love the idea of the soundtrack as well My one critique: The description of Ibalei before she was identified, for me, lessened the impact of the moment, as I was reading it as a description, if that makes any sense? For example, had it identified her, and then described how she looked through Bryan's eyes, it might have been a bit more punchy, but of course, that's just my .2c, and my own had so much exposition, feel free to disregard
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# 22
01-24-2013, 06:23 AM
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My entry is here.

I got the idea for this while reading a book on World War II (D-Day by Martin Gilbert - that's where the Churchill quote came from). Then I tried to make it as outrageous as possible.

Questions for readers:
  • Was alternating between the "log entry" and third person storytelling effective?
  • Did I make it too confusing? Obviously I wanted obscure but I might have gone too far.
  • What is an ideal length for an entry like this? I'm not the most verbose writer here, but my goal is to keep it short and simple. I think this is the longest one I have posted so far.
  • I am naming the runabouts after lesser-known scientists (Linus Pauling and Max von Laue so far). Does anyone have a good recommendation for the third and final runabout on the Odyssey? Everybody has a shuttlecraft named Einstein or Hawking so please don't go there.
Really enjoyed the quote, it set the tone perfectly Fantastic entry
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# 23
01-24-2013, 06:27 AM
Mine is another Trill-based entry. Since I've been writing my character background out, I've spent a fair bit of time reading up on Trill, it's inhabitants, and it's past. One thing that is never mentioned is how Trill developed in the mirror universe, so I started thinking about it.

In the 'prime' universe, there is a race of genetically engineered symbionts called Parasites. Or at least, there were until Picard killed the last one when he uncovered their attempts to take over Starfleet. I decided I'd have the genetic engineering that marked their beginnings as the catalyst for a somewhat different Trill, where the symbionts ruled the Trill and kept them in slavery to service their every need, including hosts.

It's not very well written, since I've just knocked it up in half an hour over my lunch break.

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# 24
01-24-2013, 06:29 AM
@ Bortjinx: Awesome use of console to console communications, that was a really nice entry
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# 25
01-24-2013, 06:30 AM
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@ Bortjinx: Awesome use of console to console communications, that was a really nice entry
Thanks Marcus. I didn't think too much of it. It was only a quick one while I was on lunch at work
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# 26
01-24-2013, 06:33 AM
Something I have found interesting, is people's willingness to betray/kill their 'evil twins', rather than the evil twins actually 'being evil'. It's almost like how Bender is the evil twin, and Flexo was a good guy
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# 27
01-24-2013, 06:38 AM
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Thanks Marcus. I didn't think too much of it. It was only a quick one while I was on lunch at work
It worked nicely, especially the alternate Jinx being male. It certainly set up some interesting aspects to possibly be explored in future pieces
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# 28
01-24-2013, 06:42 AM
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Originally Posted by superhombre777 View Post
  • I am naming the runabouts after lesser-known scientists (Linus Pauling and Max von Laue so far). Does anyone have a good recommendation for the third and final runabout on the Odyssey? Everybody has a shuttlecraft named Einstein or Hawking so please don't go there.
Everyone names them after famous Earth scientists. Why not look at some of Federation's other planets for famous scientists in Star Trek history and lore?

U.S.S. Daystrom, for example.
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# 29
01-24-2013, 06:46 AM
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Something I have found interesting, is people's willingness to betray/kill their 'evil twins', rather than the evil twins actually 'being evil'. It's almost like how Bender is the evil twin, and Flexo was a good guy
The reasoning behind (prime) Jinx being willing and ready to kill (mirror) Jinx is based very heavily on the history of a race called Parasites. What the mirror symbionts were doing is very similar to something that happened in the prime universe, which Trill pretty much swore would never happen again.

It isn't entirely 100% canon, but then it is Trek... Nothing is 100% canon apart from the the shows, so I feel it's ok to use it, and being fair, the Parasites were in the shows, and it was never explained where they came from, so it could be canon, lol.
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# 30
01-24-2013, 06:48 AM
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Originally Posted by marcusdkane View Post
It worked nicely, especially the alternate Jinx being male. It certainly set up some interesting aspects to possibly be explored in future pieces
I can think of a few...
Jinx meeting the 'prime' incarnation of mirror Jinx's host, unjoined, of course.
Trill's reaction to what the mirror symbionts are doing.
Jinx's quest to stop the mirror symbionts, and free the enslaved Trill population.
Mirror universe Trill, their plans and goals, and how they proceed.
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