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Join Date: Aug 2012
Posts: 49
# 1 My first mission
02-03-2013, 03:21 PM
Hello fellow STO-ers,

I have been tinkering with the Foundry for quite some time now and have finally finished my first mission. I'd like to know what you all think. How could it be improved? What do you think of the storyline? What could I do to make it a more impressive mission overall?

The mission is basic enough (I didn't want my first to be too complicated, else I'd probably be overwhelmed) and shouldn't take too long to complete. It's a Federation mission called "Torg's Treason" and is authored by me, Uncle2fire.

Please give me any feedback you can, all of it is appreciated!

Thanks!
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Join Date: Jun 2012
Posts: 154
# 2
02-22-2013, 12:31 AM
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Originally Posted by uncle2fire View Post
Hello fellow STO-ers,

I have been tinkering with the Foundry for quite some time now and have finally finished my first mission. I'd like to know what you all think. How could it be improved? What do you think of the storyline? What could I do to make it a more impressive mission overall?

The mission is basic enough (I didn't want my first to be too complicated, else I'd probably be overwhelmed) and shouldn't take too long to complete. It's a Federation mission called "Torg's Treason" and is authored by me, Uncle2fire.

Please give me any feedback you can, all of it is appreciated!

Thanks!
I'll try to give it a look this weekend.

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Lieutenant
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Posts: 49
# 3
02-28-2013, 01:01 AM
Thanks so much for playing!

Since publishing it, I've been working on building interior maps while I worked on another mission, and I think I'm much better than back then (I didn't even know where to start back then ), so I was thinking of going back and building custom maps for the interior and adding some more impressive flairs/details to the space maps.

If you don't mind, I'll ask you a few questions? First-time writer's obsession

What did you think of the length? Was it too long/short etc.? I wasn't sure if was just right, or too short or what.

What did you think of the dialogues? Were there cheesy parts, or parts that you thought were awkward?

I know from experience that the review box is pretty small. Is there anything specific that you noticed that you especially liked or thought didn't work out very well? Any suggested improvements?

Thanks again for playing! Your comments are welcome, I'd love to use your suggestions to improve this mission and the one(s) I'm working on!

PS: I'm kinda new to the whole mail system in STO, so I can't figure out how to message you Would you be willing to give me your handle so we can talk about this in-game? My handle/name thingy is Thol@uncle2fire. Thanks!

Last edited by uncle2fire; 02-28-2013 at 01:06 AM.
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