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# 151
03-17-2013, 09:31 PM
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That's a good point about the Academy having its own frat-like societies, and how dissolving the command track could have helped break their hold on Starfleet's culture. I wonder if Voyager was an early step in that direction, and the inspiration for that mechanic in STO: the show emphasized Janeway having been a science officer, and they described Voyager itself as a science ship (and, in the same time frame, the Defiant as a tactical ship), as opposed to the Enterprise as a ship-of-all-trades.
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It's easy to imagine how, with that sort of specialization already emerging and with command cliques like Nova Squadron causing disastrous scandals, and with the Federation already moving toward a more versatile culture with the dual citizenship program and flexible uniform requirements (for more Zen shop costu... I mean, to reflect a greater tolerance for different cultures ), the decision to let any career track segue into a command role based on merit alone would become the norm.
If "Tapestry" is any indication, to be science track was looked at badly AND a career dead end. Seeing what happened to Picard in that alternate timeline makes it very clear to me that something major had to have changed on the way to 2409.
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# 152
03-18-2013, 02:32 PM
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Done at last! "Respondez s'il vous Plait" is based on Literary Challenge #9, Shore Leave, and, since Azera Xi's stories tend to be rather dark and focused on the Borg, this one breaks away to instead follow the rest of her bridge crew, with no mention of the Borg and Azera as a supporting character. It's a shame we're in the middle of March: just one month earlier and this could've been the Azera Xi Valentine's Day Special.
I really enjoyed this piece Absolutely, a very different tone than your recent entries, but the characterizations were all spot on and thoroughly engaging

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@marcusdkane: Some surprisingly mature marital issues presented, it's great to see Seven's return, and the Vulcan cultural touches are so authentic as to leave us humans feeling a little like outsiders. The climax is very exciting and cleverly resolved - and ha, there are sonic screwdrivers in the Federation according to Memory Alpha! You learn something new every day...
Thanks, I wanted to try and cover T'Marc and Sulak's issues in a way which were sensitive and realistic, but equally humorous I think my overall aim, was to have Selek as the main narrator, so that even during the flashbacks, it was his memories of Marcus, rather than Marcus' overtaking, and to have the cultural touches seem totally natural rather than exaggerated or forced ^_^ I figured any engineer worth his salt would have a sonic screwdriver to hand ^_^ (although Marcus would eventually meet with the 10th Doctor some years after that mission... )

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# 153
03-18-2013, 02:34 PM
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I was writing from work, and they banned google docs from the systems, so I posted up my half-completed post way before it was ready as a means to save it.

Only then did I realize I could've just PM'd myself the manuscript.

I apologize for this shoddy piece!!
Nothing at all to apologize for, this was a great entry, it will be great to see a continuation or find out what happens next An awesome use of a tin foil hat too
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# 154
03-18-2013, 03:29 PM
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@marcusdkane: Finally got around to reading yours, and I thoroughly enjoyed it. Aside from my surprise at certain cameo appearances, the pacing and action were both handled quite well. Though now, between your story and GulBerat's, you're making me imagine more and more what an assimilated Highlander-style immortal would be like...
Thank you Was it Seven's cameo which you mean? All I can do, is put my hands up and admit that it was a self-indulgence on my part to include her (and to have her wearing her original silver bodysuit... ) but I wanted to try and do so in as controlled way as possible

Ever since I first came up with the idea of Marcus being a Borg Specialist, I'd wondered what would have happened if the Borg tried to assimilate a Highlander immortal, and if the Quickening would allow them to suppress the nano-probes. Once Voyager introduced the idea that drones had a biological regenerative ability as well, I figured that they might instead only be 'slightly resistant' rather than immune, and that it would not surprise me if an immortal might not have been already assimilated at some point, and for the Quickening to be detectable to a Borg ocular implant, as well as to a Devidian's ability to detect neural energy.

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# 155
03-18-2013, 05:55 PM
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I really enjoyed this piece Absolutely, a very different tone than your recent entries, but the characterizations were all spot on and thoroughly engaging :-)
Thanks! Since the last few stories had been so dark and focused on the Borg, I wanted to give the crew a chance to relax and just have a "day in the life" story where we can get to know them better. Corspa in particular really came to life for me as I wrote her: she's so much the team mom of the group that seeing both her proud and vulnerable side added more to her character than I'd ever planned. And poor Azera will get a happy ending, even if she's starting to seem like the Charlie Brown of starship captains...

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Thanks, I wanted to try and cover T'Marc and Sulak's issues in a way which were sensitive and realistic, but equally humorous :-) I think my overall aim, was to have Selek as the main narrator, so that even during the flashbacks, it was his memories of Marcus, rather than Marcus' overtaking, and to have the cultural touches seem totally natural rather than exaggerated or forced ^_^ I figured any engineer worth his salt would have a sonic screwdriver to hand ^_^ (although Marcus would eventually meet with the 10th Doctor some years after that mission... )
Oh, you succeeded! I was a little startled just because those aren't topics you usually see in Trek - it's a bit like if HBO got the rights to the next series (in a good way!). The Vulcan references work very well: it does feel like we're listening on a conversation between two people naturally immersed in that culture, and even if we don't get all the references, the conversation carries us along and still makes sense. That's always a tricky thing in writing for an alien culture, balancing between the extremes of the characters seeming nonsensical or constantly stopping and explaining themselves to nobody in particular, and you pull it off well. And Highlander, Star Trek and Doctor Who all in one setting? Either the universe is in very good hands, or it's completely doomed... with the Doctor, you can never quite be sure which way it'll go.

More stories read!

@ironpheonix113: Two LC's for the price of one! I liked it, it's a very poetic and subdued story. The quiet contrast of past and present during the final tour of the old ship's especially poignant, and it builds to an understated but uplifting last line from Bryan. I'll have to hunt down some more of your stories, since the idea of the ship's AI being a character is intriguing...

@ambassadormolari: Another haunting and atmospheric story, and this one ends on a very grim note. The wormhole the Da Vinci encounters is beautifully described, and I like the way the story of what happened to Nar-Etulis is slowly built up for the reader despite the characters knowing it, alongside the mystery of what happened to it in the mirror universe. Very well done!

@khayuung: A very poetic opening, and an intriguing setup. The crowd demands more!

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# 156
03-18-2013, 08:08 PM
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@ironpheonix113: Two LC's for the price of one! I liked it, it's a very poetic and subdued story. The quiet contrast of past and present during the final tour of the old ship's especially poignant, and it builds to an understated but uplifting last line from Bryan. I'll have to hunt down some more of your stories, since the idea of the ship's AI being a character is intriguing...
Thanks! I was really going for a more subtle and thought-provoking piece than what I usually write, which I guess I succeeded at doing from what you and others have said.. The part where Bryan is touring his old ship is, in my opinion, the best work I've done yet in these LC's. One reason I included a sentient AI as a character is I wanted to explore something that had never really been done in Star Trek. While TOS did have the M5, I'm not sure if I would count that as a sentient...entity, given that it was still heavily based off of another person. The the idea I've tried to convey for Athena is that she is her own perosn, with her own thoughts, feelings, emotions, and reactions. Where I got the inspiration for the idea was Andromeda and EDI from the Mass Effect series. Plus, the generic computers in ST can be pretty boring at times.
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# 157
03-19-2013, 07:29 AM
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@@cmdrscarlet: You know, the thought of a male Deltan has somehow never crossed my mind. It's fun to see how the men are every bit the irresistible sirens as the women, and while some of the character details may have gone over my head (I'm definitely curious about what marcus meant about mirror universe Daikar), it's still a very concisely told, emotional story.
Thank you very much! Daikar was introduced in LC 37

To be revealing: I'm a transplant from the City of Heroes MMO after they shut down. Kathryn was my character there and I feel I successfully crafted her over the years on my "guilds'" message boards (needless to say, I am rebuilding her to a different audience). Daikar played a very prominent role over there. LC37 was a way to bring him back ... which is ironic when/if you read it. So, for this LC, I thought to bring him back in the "prime" universe. You'll be seeing more of him in the future as cameos as he is not a character in the game

As for him being Deltan, I always wondered what the bid deal was that Ilea was Deltan in ST:TMP. Then I read things like this in various places and thought ... whoa, ok neat!

Admittedly, I enjoy writing the (very) short pieces. Besides it being easy for me to churn out, I am deliberately letting the reader fill in holes if they choose. For example, why is Daikar on [i]Solaris/i] - is it an inspection or was he invited for other reasons? What happened in Club 47 - was there a brawl? What happened after the drinks - did Daikar just leave or did something else happen? Don't get me wrong, I love Love LOVE the relatively longer works presented by other authors here that are more complete and comprehensive, I'm just not built to craft a story like that ... yet.

Still, I would like to develop Kathryn's emotional and physical capabilities better, like almost everyone else here has done. For example, I feel like I know Aloysha better than I have let gulberat know about Kathryn. That may be just my perception though.
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# 158
03-19-2013, 07:58 AM
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Thanks! Since the last few stories had been so dark and focused on the Borg, I wanted to give the crew a chance to relax and just have a "day in the life" story where we can get to know them better. Corspa in particular really came to life for me as I wrote her: she's so much the team mom of the group that seeing both her proud and vulnerable side added more to her character than I'd ever planned.
It really did work nicely, and again, the present/flashback continuities reminded me again of Eric Lustbader's works I thought all the characters worked really nicely, but I totally understand what you mean about writing Corspa, as I found a similar thing with writing Lieutenant Mayer, and surprisingly, he's developed into a totally different character than I'd intended him to be, when I named him

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And poor Azera will get a happy ending, even if she's starting to seem like the Charlie Brown of starship captains...
I'm glad to hear ^_^ Equally, Amanda lives a pretty solitary existence, only
time will tell if the LCs will change that

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Oh, you succeeded! I was a little startled just because those aren't topics you usually see in Trek - it's a bit like if HBO got the rights to the next series (in a good way!). The Vulcan references work very well: it does feel like we're listening on a conversation between two people naturally immersed in that culture, and even if we don't get all the references, the conversation carries us along and still makes sense. That's always a tricky thing in writing for an alien culture, balancing between the extremes of the characters seeming nonsensical or constantly stopping and explaining themselves to nobody in particular, and you pull it off well.
I'm glad I hit the right balance ^_^ In the past, Trek has tended to steer clear of the topic of sexuality, with the only example I can think of, being the Dax/Kahn relationship. I'd read on Beta though, that Tucker had a brother who was in a same-sex marriage, and that Lieutenant Hawk had been, prior to his death in First Contact, so I wanted to try and maintain that level of respect for the subject, without drawing too much attention to it (in general) I also wanted to establish why T'Marc would be single if she was to feature in future writing, rather than a typically bonded woman.
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I forgot to clarify... The instances where Marcus had been haunted by the voices of the Collective, were solely post-traumatic, rather than a truly residual connection. I figured that once the nano-probes were disabled, the Quickening would have re-written his biology back to normal (well, normal for him...) so there would not have been the residual genome shifts which Seven and Picard would have had, and that when he assured Selek that the Collective was not aware of them, that was an educated guess based on his study of the Borg and their behavior, rather than a direct awareness of the Collective itself.

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And Highlander, Star Trek and Doctor Who all in one setting? Either the universe is in very good hands, or it's completely doomed...
Not quite a spoiler, as I'm not sure if I'm even going to pursue the idea, but I have been mulling over the idea of having a Barsoom Thark as the Valkyrie's new officer... I'm really not sure yet...

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with the Doctor, you can never quite be sure which way it'll go.
As for the Doctor, here's the sample chapter where he meets a few of my characters

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# 159
03-19-2013, 08:24 AM
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...I always wondered what the bid deal was that Ilea was Deltan in ST:TMP...


I forget how old I was the first time I saw TMP but I was definitely only a child, and Ilia left a huge impression on me... To this day, I still have a thing for bald women, and can't think of a more aesthetically beautiful woman than Persis Khambatta (with Susanna Thompson's Borg Queen a close second)
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# 160
03-19-2013, 09:07 AM
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I forget how old I was the first time I saw TMP but I was definitely only a child, and Ilia left a huge impression on me...
EXACTLY!!

Well now we know
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