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# 21
03-19-2014, 07:06 AM
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My entry is in.

Smirk, you picked the one topic I had a story already written for: how STO should end. Since season 7, I've known how STO should end. On two points: a quote from Daniels in Enterprise: "Earth is still there... in a manner of speaking." and the main motto of Star Trek "To seek out new life and new civilizations - To boldly go where no one has gone before."

In many ways, I see it being a phoenix of sorts. Much like the titular bird and the identically named and themed warp ship Cochrane created, the Federation and the other powers of the quadrant have started to wane and this is a rebirth through fire.

Earth is lost, but repairable via terraforming, but much history has been burned away. The UFP, Romulan Star Empire, and the klingon Empire all are ended (the RSE collapsing with Sela's disappearance, the other two collapsing here). But the new federation born from it is based on much the same principle as what Picard learned from Captain Dathon of the Children of Tama. "A Trial Shared Creates Understanding." And they have all lost a home. The Romulans, once closed minded, open their homes to these two races after theirs are taken from them. And for once there is a common goal amongst them: to create a future together.

The last image of this game should be a pan across New Romulus... the classic trek motto playing over as this strange new world (New Romulus) is explored and built on by Romulans, humans and Klingons, as a new civilization and way of life is born. Boldly going into the future, together.
This was a truly fantastic entry, I don't think I can add anything else as to just how nicely written it was
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# 23
03-19-2014, 07:32 AM
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Oooooh, the appearance of Nemesis herself... Nice
Humorous/silly enough that you don't mind the blatant genre savvy?
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# 24
03-19-2014, 07:33 AM
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@worffan:

Brilliant!
Thanks! I'm working on a more serious one with "Do'eth"/D'trel now. Should be up in a few minutes.
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# 25
03-19-2014, 07:51 AM
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To me, it read as someone older, who has seen too much combat and fights for the duty and protection of those who can't, but who's soul has tired of it all. For some reason in my head, it was read in an older male voice (probably because I'm male, so I always default that way). But there was nothing in it to suggest either way, it works for male or female. And in fact, reading it in a female voice, and knowing the person is female, gives no alteration to my perception of the character at all.
I'm glad it can work either way. I'm female so that's the voice in my head of the nameless captain. I guess the captain's age and gender is entirely up to the reader to discover and decide. And I shall let them do so!
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# 26
03-19-2014, 08:40 AM
My second is up. Not entirely satisfied with the ending, will probably edit it.

...and I just remembered that you're only supposed to post 1 for the non-redux LCs. I'll go back and fix that.
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# 27
03-19-2014, 08:45 AM
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Humorous/silly enough that you don't mind the blatant genre savvy?
How to quantify my reaction... It was posted as a humorous piece, so I didn't even attemot to take it seriously... I enjoyed it once it got to Quinn's office, the first half was just 'Three being wierd again' But as I've said before, I'm not the Intended audience... If you were to offer a Jew or a Muslim a breakfast platter of sausage, sausage squares, sliced ham and bacon, well, getting them to even eat it would be a debatable proposition
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# 28
03-19-2014, 08:49 AM
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How to quantify my reaction... It was posted as a humorous piece, so I didn't even attemot to take it seriously... I enjoyed it once it got to Quinn's office, the first half was just 'Three being wierd again' But as I've said before, I'm not the Intended audience... If you were to offer a Jew or a Muslim a breakfast platter of sausage, sausage squares, sliced ham and bacon, well, getting them to even eat it would be a debatable proposition
Ok...

So you enjoyed it and laughed at it? Because that was my goal.

Edit to add: I've cleaned up, refined, and moved the version I did featuring "Do'eth"/D'trel and company. Thoughts?
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Last edited by worffan101; 03-19-2014 at 09:18 AM.
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# 29
03-19-2014, 10:00 AM
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Hmmm. Methinks this calls for a flash-forward to Admiral Grunt, and the USS Ferenginar...
Flash-forward is the same idea I had. I'll have to tread carefully.


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# 30
03-19-2014, 10:39 AM
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Flash-forward is the same idea I had. I'll have to tread carefully.
Why "tread carefully"? I figure standard rule applies - we're each writing our own separate timeline, unless previously arranged otherwise. (Sometimes we even get to borrow elements, like when I got to invoke the "Good Masters" in one LC even though Grunt patently lives in a completely different timeline from those most excellent stories.)

All I ask is that if you use one of my ships/captains in your story, and he/she doesn't survive - make it a good death.
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