If the bridge officer pop-ups were reduced in number, and the text reworded so that my officers stopped holding my hand and leading me through the mission like a lost child, this mission would be significantly improved.
Thank you for taking time to run through my project. I agree, the BOff text was a bit condescending and repetitive. I had some of those in as place holders and didn't realize how much they affected the story. A correction is now being published.
Part two will answer some of the questions posed by the prophet. But as this is a multi-story arc, the goal was to hook you. Glad it worked.
Again, thank you for taking the time to review my work.
Hey, I just finished putting my mission on Holodeck. I'm always open to more feedback, it really helps.
Conjoined - ST-HJAAWDWF8
A distant Federation world grapples with mysterious setbacks in their attempts to bridge the light-years between them and the heart of the Federation. Will you be able to figure out what's really going on out on the edge of unknown space?
Just a reminder since we talked in PM not posted, about my klingon mission lvl 31+ Stirring the hornets nest
Ah, ok. That explains why I couldn't find your mission. My Klingon Captain is only a Commander 6. I should be getting him to Captain soon, then I'll review your mission.
Also, I've been having some difficulty finding missions. I naturally log on with my lowest level character and often can't find the mission. Then I have to log out and back on with another character, and so on and so forth.
Earlier today I tried to review "Saving the 4th Fleet", which was next on my list. I was unable to find it with 2 different characters, so I reviewed "Songs of the Deep Azure Sky" instead. I'll be posting that review shortly, and later today I'll try to find "Saving the 4th Fleet" with my Vice Admiral.
From now on I'm going to have to require that review requests have not only the name or number of the mission, but also which side it's for (Starfleet/KDF) and the minimum level requirement.
I've edited the OP and added in the new requirement.