But aside from that: REALLY well done. I'm sorry I giggled while reading, it was somber, just that the start had thrown me off and I thought I was headed for a parody.
I see what you mean. I just reread it. The Tobarri tradition of Initiation, something that had been such a happy occassion for the crew, had suddenly become a harsh reminder of the time they failed to protect each other. Yet, the tradition continues on, hopefully with a better appreciation for one another.