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# 1 Ghost Ships (KDF Edition)
11-15-2011, 10:21 PM
Ghost Ships (KDF Edition)

If you can please take a look at this mission, it is my first piece of work and I welcome input. contact me at @samueldavidson1701


Mission name:
Ghost Ships (KDF Edition)

Mission Description:
General Worf tells he was contacted by an old friend. Who had received a report from the S.S. Denver that there some old Klingon ship's found in the Veyga system.

I need you to go to the Veyga system. If the ships are there. I want you to bring them home or destroy them so they won't fall into the wrong hands.

The Veyga System is located in the Hromi Sector of the Pi Canis Sector Block.
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# 2
11-16-2011, 06:19 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by SamuelDavidson1701
Ghost Ships (KDF Edition)

If you can please take a look at this mission, it is my first piece of work and I welcome input. contact me at @samueldavidson1701


Mission name:
Ghost Ships (KDF Edition)

Mission Description:
General Worf tells he was contacted by an old friend. Who had received a report from the S.S. Denver that there some old Klingon ship's found in the Veyga system.

I need you to go to the Veyga system. If the ships are there. I want you to bring them home or destroy them so they won't fall into the wrong hands.

The Veyga System is located in the Hromi Sector of the Pi Canis Sector Block.
I'll take a look this evening and post my report after.
Brian
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Quote:
Originally Posted by SamuelDavidson1701
Ghost Ships (KDF Edition)
Mission name:
Ghost Ships (KDF Edition)
Klingon Mission - Ghost Ships
Author: SamuelDavidson1701
Allegiance: Klingon
Mission ID: ST-HDUR45VPH

----------Report Start-----------

Summary: This is a great concept for a mission. The story is engaging but seems to be missing key story elements that would help to drive the story. I made some recommendations on some of the maps to help you try to bring the story together by adding some additional dialog in various places. The overall mission is very playable from the investigations to the battles. It just needs some fine tuning. The maps you designed are good and the effects well done. The battles are tough but not impossible to win.

There are several issues with the dialog that I won’t elaborate on here in this forum. I will send them to you separately via PM…

---------End Report----------

Thanks again for authoring and for giving me the chance to review your work. This report is intended to help you and is not intended as a slam on you. Please feel free to ask me if you have any questions.
Brian

This critique report also filed 11/16/2011 on forum posting for: In depth mission reports upon request.
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Update, I have posted info on this mission on STO WIki. here is link to the page.
http://www.stowiki.org/Foundry:Ghost...(ST-HDUR45VPH)
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