Summary: This is a great concept for a mission. The story is engaging but seems to be missing key story elements that would help to drive the story. I made some recommendations on some of the maps to help you try to bring the story together by adding some additional dialog in various places. The overall mission is very playable from the investigations to the battles. It just needs some fine tuning. The maps you designed are good and the effects well done. The battles are tough but not impossible to win.
There are several issues with the dialog that I won’t elaborate on here in this forum. I will send them to you separately via PM…
Thanks again for authoring and for giving me the chance to review your work. This report is intended to help you and is not intended as a slam on you. Please feel free to ask me if you have any questions.