Originally Posted by evil70th

I liked Enliss. She seemed like a strong and very driven character. I am sure we will see her again.

Brian

Originally Posted by designationxr377

Say, Evil70th, I've got a new mission out and I like your reviews and help whenever I publish a new mission.

With my recent publish though, I worked around with some dialog mechanics to make the desired feel I wanted. And lots and lots of branches with different triggers. Knowing you go through a lot of the dialog via minimizing and re-opening dialog windows, you could be exposed to the mechanics going... well... pretty nuts. I doubt it would make the mission impossible at any point to complete, but, would definitely break the feel of the mission in a few points.

Would you still be interested in running a review on my mission, despite the added awkward my optional objectives and mini-things will add to it via your review process?

Originally Posted by markhawkman

Ah, cool. Did you read the other thread? It's not really meant to be harsh.

Originally Posted by evil70th

Federation Mission - In the Shadow of MIDAS, Part 1
Author: greendragoon
Allegiance: Federation
Project ID: ST-HJ7NMF3PH

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Thanks again for authoring and for giving me the chance to review your work. The mission from start to finish is outstanding. I look forward to playing/reviewing more of your work in the future.
Brian

This critique report also filed 12/30/2012 on forum posting for: In the Shadow of MIDAS, Part 1

Originally Posted by evil70th

Federation Mission - Cold Enemies
Author: Q400
Allegiance: Federation
Project ID: ST-HMPU9PRYS

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Summary: The mission is a nice combat oriented mission with some story dialogue to move it forward. I would recommend this mission to other players who like combat oriented missions, although not on Elite level as it was challenging enough on Normal level.

Below are a couple of things I noted while playing the mission that I wanted to let you know about. Everything in this write up should be seen as suggestions on ways I felt you could improve certain elements of the mission. They are yours to do with as you see fit.

Mission Description: This is a good description. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this description.

Grant Mission Dialogue: The grant dialogue and follow dialogue are well written. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this dialogue.

Mission Task: This is a good initial task with a clear start location for the first custom map. I noted no spelling errors with this task.

Mission Entry Prompt: This is a good use of the prompt. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this prompt.

MAPS:
The Vault System: This is a nice map design with several tough but fun battles. The story dialogue is well written. I noted no spelling or grammatical errors with this dialogue or any issues with the map.

The Vault - Floor Three - Engineering and Cargobays: This is a good map design with a tough but fun battle. I noted one item to consider changing:
-One of the injured Reman?s is sitting above the medical bed.

Meeting System: This is a good map design with a nice battle. The story dialogue is well written. I noted one item to consider changing:
-The "Angered Admiral" dialogue; consider changing "[Rank]?[Rank]?" to read "[Rank]? [Rank]?".

Meeting Place: This is a nice simple map design with some tough but fun battles. The story dialogue is well written. I noted one item to consider changing:
-Consider adding a respawn point closer to the Breen position.

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Thanks again for authoring and for giving me the chance to review your work. I enjoyed the mission and good luck in the challenge. I look forward to playing/reviewing more of your work in the future.
Brian

Originally Posted by thegreendragoon1

Thank you Evil70th, for taking the time to go through and review my mission. This is all excellent feedback, and a few things I hadn't even considered before. It will probably all make it into my next polish pass. I'll definitely call on you again when Part 2 is ready.

Originally Posted by q403

Thanks - I appreciate it

Originally Posted by designationxr377

I figure I'll toss this one at you for the polish and input you give. Thanks in advance, as always. (Be careful/aware that some dialog trees may provoke different effects, but should not effect mission completion, only flow.)


Mission: Time Will Tell
Author: XR-377
Level: 31+
Allegiance: Klingon
Estimated Mission Length:30-45m (Full Dialog Tree Exploration may yield different results)
Method of Delivery: Forum Post

Description: When K.D.F. High Command asks you to investigate a strange anomaly near Qo'noS you find yourself face to face with a dark future for the Empire. Will you find the guides you need to make sure it doesn't come to pass?