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# 91
03-11-2013, 05:09 PM
@ ambassadormolari - Heck. Yes! The back and forth in this piece was well done. I'm a little surprised, yet pleased, that Arkos is sympathetic but holding fast to his Federation training. In effect, that does make him a counterpart to the Telvenar. Oh and the brief glimpses into the Korda ... you, sir, have a LOT of 'splainin' to do in the future

I have to say though, the rules prohibit multiple posts, but if branflakes is ok with it, then so am I for this round

I'm still working on the the rest!
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# 92
03-11-2013, 06:06 PM
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I'm still working on the the rest!


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# 93
03-11-2013, 06:51 PM
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@ ambassadormolari - Heck. Yes! The back and forth in this piece was well done. I'm a little surprised, yet pleased, that Arkos is sympathetic but holding fast to his Federation training. In effect, that does make him a counterpart to the Telvenar. Oh and the brief glimpses into the Korda ... you, sir, have a LOT of 'splainin' to do in the future

I have to say though, the rules prohibit multiple posts, but if branflakes is ok with it, then so am I for this round

Ah. Never quite noticed that part of the rules, actually. But there's no reason why I can't leave it as is, as I think I ended it at a good spot. Plus, I can simply post the full story later in Ten Forward. Otherwise, glad you like it!

Also, regarding some of the stories I've had time to read so far:

superhombre: I demand that you write more stuff featuring ch'Raul. Seriously, though, that entire piece was a nice close up of that one character. I like the idea that the ship's counselor is, in many ways, the guy who is holding the ship together, in a manner of speaking.

sander233: I loved it! Even if it was just an "introduction of ship, captain and crew" piece, the way you constructed it was really well done. It felt in many ways like a tour for the reader in LaRoca's footsteps, and you managed to throw plenty of backstory in there without going overboard. I can't wait to see more.

shevet: A fantastic read! I appreciate that you wrote Tylha having to deal with local planetary politics in addition to having one of her officers incarcerated-- the varying attitudes of the Taserions towards the Federation came across quite well. And as others have pointed out, a murder mystery engages the reader by making them look for clues and put things together in their head, and in that respect your story succeeded. Well done!

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# 94
03-11-2013, 07:29 PM
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Welp, mine's up. Loosely based on LC #22. I love a good murder mystery... shame I can't write one, really.!
Whatever...I enjoyed your entry (and I very rarely read mysteries). Here's a far-fetched idea...I noticed your spelling of words like "favourite" - is the idea of a non-relevant aristocracy political commentary on the current British system? Or am I reading into things too much?

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Am I right in thinking T'Prynn is the Enterprise-E's new counselor who called out Picard on his flaunting of regulations and being an egotist? I absolutely loved the idea of someone standing up to someone of Picard's stature, rather than simply accepting his decisions as automatically right
I don't remember who the new counselor is. T'Prynn is the <spoiler>lesbian intelligence officer who fell in love with an enemy spy and had no qualms about destroying people's careers or going outside the normal legal system to get things done</spoiler>. She first shows up in David Mack's Harbinger.

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Was degree in psychology, by any chance?
Nope. I enrolled in one psychology class and dropped it after the first session. I just have a plethora of friends & family to observe and learn from.

I now have two goals for future "challenges:" write something cheery (wounded warriors was worthwhile but depressing) and include space combat. I'm also toying with the idea of one entry being an article from the Federation News Service.

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superhombre: I demand that you write more stuff featuring ch'Raul. Seriously, though, that entire piece was a nice close up of that one character. I like the idea that the ship's counselor is, in many ways, the guy who is holding the ship together, in a manner of speaking.
With pleasure.

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# 95
03-12-2013, 01:10 AM
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sander233: I loved it! Even if it was just an "introduction of ship, captain and crew" piece, the way you constructed it was really well done. It felt in many ways like a tour for the reader in LaRoca's footsteps, and you managed to throw plenty of backstory in there without going overboard. I can't wait to see more.
Thank you very much! That's exactly the effect I was aiming for; I'm glad I was able to pull it off. (And you will definitely be seeing more...)
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# 96
03-12-2013, 06:41 AM
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# 97
03-12-2013, 08:12 AM
@ superhombre777 - Dagnabit, that was brilliant. I'm not sure what more I can say other than I feel like I am writing with champions of prose in these LCs. It's damn humbling.
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# 98
03-12-2013, 10:03 AM
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Whatever...I enjoyed your entry (and I very rarely read mysteries). Here's a far-fetched idea...I noticed your spelling of words like "favourite" - is the idea of a non-relevant aristocracy political commentary on the current British system? Or am I reading into things too much?
Err... I just spell it like that 'cause I'm British! "Theatre", too, you might have noticed.
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# 99
03-12-2013, 10:24 AM
In the US, you tend to see both spellings for "theater." You get "theatre" in cases when someone wants the venue to seem high-class.

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# 100
03-12-2013, 11:05 AM
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I don't remember who the new counselor is. T'Prynn is the <spoiler>lesbian intelligence officer who fell in love with an enemy spy and had no qualms about destroying people's careers or going outside the normal legal system to get things done</spoiler>. She first shows up in David Mack's Harbinger.
Ahh, I think I know who you mean now, Elias Vaughn named his daughter after her... I was thinking of Counselor T'Lana
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